like many of my posts here...
TL;DR. lol.. but seriously you asked for input.. its too long and I didnt read... here goes:
Time the ads copy - just copy and paste your ads raw text to:
Script Timer - Words to Time Calculator | Edge Studio
That'll time the ad out for you.
Magazine ad? flyer? You've only got 10 seconds to get your points out. so..
Show the product in use!
Show the product in use!
Show the product in use! (vs some art that is irrelevant).
cut the wording by 80%.
Im guessing a picture of a project scheduling wall or a photo showing the material in use in some way.
If I cant imagine how to use it my clients cant either.
And I certainly wont buy a roll of something that I dont understand.
Bullet point the uses that SIGN CUSTOMERS will have for it. SELL TO MY CUSTOMERS, NOT ME.
Avoid questions like "what is xbase".. and trade specific questions.. tell my client what it does for them and show that. I'll understand as well.
Sell the sizzle, not the unbutchered meat. I'd cut the text, it reads like an engineer wrote it. No offense but terms like "proprietary polyester humma de humma" and run on sentences like "do you love installation and deinstallation...blah blah blah" are flow killers.. save that for the tech bulletin the shops get with a roll.
try things like these:
Want to put graphics on a wall and change them regularly? ok.
Tired of the mess of dry erase? ok
Magnets falling off and getting lost from project boards? hmmm.
Turn a wall into a flow chart in minutes.. oooooh!
each of those could be a cartoon or a photo..
thats my take on it.. maybe i dont understand the material?
Try to coordinate the wording and the imagery to hit the top 3 points of your product's strengths in under 6 seconds. For the whole thing, force it into a 15 second radio ad or elevator pitch using the timer.. if you cant describe its use to the end user in 15 seconds, its too complex.. this is harder than it seems.
Oh and leave out prices, many shops will show your ad to their client before they buy, and no one wants his/her client asking about why $.88 psf material is now $10 psf.. (jeez we're sign people, we make that kind of markup all the time, our other option was investment banking, but profits were too low)