If you are asking for a critique I would honestly have to say you might want to consider starting over. The red is WAY too over saturated and there are no tones to break it up. You need to make it appealing to the eye not give someone eye strain.
Drive a stake through the heart of your Copperplate font files. This type face should never be used much larger than 12 point
Is this just a temporary sign until they can get a permanent fascia sign?
This last one looks better, but I would make the areas that you have blue be a cream color. The red and blue look clashy together.
I'd lose the weird clip art.
The tagline could be a bit bigger, perhaps stacked, and I would put the phone number on the door of the business, where the hours were listed (if it's a glass door)