Critics welcome compliments enjoyed!

[Jackflush]

Is there any hope for a hack like me. Someday... maybe. My client fell in love with the ribbons on the sides. Do you all have any suggestions. I broke the font rules what else does your eye tell you about this one. Ill put my catchers mask on and standby.

 

[CanuckSigns]

it's not bad for a first revision, a few suggestions:
- can you make the ribbons more flowing, they don't really look like ribbons right now, too straight and square

- choose a different colour or font for the names, they are very hard to read, they lack contrast

I think it's definitely a good start, jut going to take a bit of tweaking.

 

[Salmoneye]

Maybe a background color in all of the area except the area with the names, it's a lot of white. How is the sign going to be made and used?

 

[Dave Drane]

I don't think the script looks right on an honour board.

 

[visual800]

script wrong choice, ribbons are to thick and over powering

 

[Jillbeans]

Use the same font as you used for TWENTY YEAR CLUB on the names.
Honors board names shouldn't be in script, lovely as that one is.
Love....Jill

 

[SignaramaFL]

The names in the middle, I would choose a different font, something not as scripty...., and also the ribbons as said before try and make them more flowy...

 

[Tim Aucoin]

I totally agree with using a different font for the names. That script makes them look like one big blur... very hard to read.

 

[signgal]

I agree. Try the blue for the names and take Jill's suggestion on the font. Ditto on the ribbons. I like the idea but they are too stiff. Add a slight wave and you might try them as more of a green primarily. They are stealing too much of the attention.

 

[Kyle Blue]

+1 to everything said here. The only thing I have to add is that your "spikes" around the 50 years are to big. They look like blue suns instead of ribbons. I'd make them a little smaller.

 

[neato]

It's a nice layout. I agree though, there's too much script. Use the san serif font for the names. It'll make it more pleasing.

BTW, I think in this instance you did NOT break the font rule. I count 3 fonts. That works with this layout. Is that what you were referring to when you said you broke the font rules?

 

[Mason]

Too hard to read

 

[Jackflush]

Thanks for those great suggestions... And yes I thought three fonts in any one design was forbade. lol Maybe those ribbons can be outline. Its a plague for Sams club Alaska and a shirt design. Does it matter if I post shirt designs here? Would that still be ok with Fred?

 

[SignManiac]

Change the color of your ribbons to a gold, tone them down a bit so they don't dominate the design with such a strong contrasting color.

But if it were me, I would go in a completely different direction all together.

 

[Jackflush]

The ribbons wont curve without making funny negative space so I just toned them down some change the font and sent it...

 

[ProWraps]

looks like a nice plague!

 

[signgal]

much better I can tell you were limited to the two colors and I wondered if the "wavy" ribbons might create awkward negative space.they can't all be masterpieces

 

[signmeup]

That Molly sure helps a lot.

 

[JR's]

It doesn't look bad. Some of things I would change to make it read better would be.
The names in the columns could be smaller and the space between them should be a little larger.
So you read the name before your eye looks to the next line. [Compulsive graphic relativity]
you could try to left justify the columns.

And I would tone down the ribbons and the column of names and tuck that under the top part.
I think that would prioritize your thoughts a little bit better.


JR

 

[rjpjr]

How is the sign going to be made and used?

I thought this was an important question...

Without knowing the above, I recommend bringing the ribbon elements together to work as one element.