Does this make sense????

[slappy]

Please, please, pretty please... any feedback would help. Does this make sense. Would this get you in my door??? Any suggestions would be great. I gotta send this to the paper today. And then design another for another paper, but smaller.

 

[imagep]

I dont understand. Is the girl Tonneau? Or is she going to give me a free tonneau? Either way, I'll take it!

In other words, I have no idea what a Tonneau is.

 

[Marlene]

I think you need to say "win a free Tonnea" or "enter to win..." as when I read it, I thought you were giving them away, the I saw the fine print.

 

[R08]

Made sense to me.

 

[slappy]

better?? should i put something like IS GIVING ONE LUCKY WINNER.....

 

[imagep]

I still have no idea what a Tonneau is. Is it the truck?

Maybe I am stupid, actually I think that is a well demonstrated fact, but lots of us are morons. If I don't know what a Tonneau is, I figure some other people don't know either. Is there anyway that you can explain, even in the small print, what the heck is being given away?

 

[slappy]

tonneau's are covers for the bed of a truck. So you can use your truck bed for stuff so it don't get wet. We're giving away one of these. Customer can choose any one under $609.

http://www.agricover.com/index.php/products/category/C9/

 

[weaselboogie]

Maybe a bolder one liner of " Every purchase over $5 receives 5 entry tickets towards Tonneau cover raffle " I'm assuming it's a raffle? Put the rest of the fine print below.

 

[onesource]

Folks who own a truck will understand just fine!, I see nothing wrong with it, it's a legible coupon with a hot girl

 

[imagep]

tonneau's are covers for the bed of a truck. So you can use your truck bed for stuff so it don't get wet. We're giving away one of these. Customer can choose any one under $609.

http://www.agricover.com/index.php/products/category/C9/

Oh. I don't own a pickup, never had, so maybe that explains my ignorance.

 

[slappy]

weasleboogie... better?? copy and pasted it in

 

[slappy]

Oh. I don't own a pickup, never had, so maybe that explains my ignorance.

that's why i got "can't guarantee application for winning vehicle" someone with a car might enter to win just to win.

 

[Mosh]

Looks better now.

 

[CES020]

I think it looks nice, but I have no clue what kind of store it's being given away at. Is it a truck store? A printing company? A sign shop? If I don't know what they sell, I'm probably not going.

 

[slappy]

we have/own a truck accessory shop. It's our primary business. I have a sign shop inside of it.

 

[Marlene]

much better.

 

[weaselboogie]

weasleboogie... better?? copy and pasted it in

 

[54warrior]

Last rev looks great to me. I think I even know where your shop is at, I got a friend who lives on Edgewood Drive, close to the Sheetz and the 'Jughandle'. There is another establishment up the road that I've been to a few times as well. hahahaha

 

[slappy]

yep... you know where i'm at! i'm in between the two! stop by some time!

 

[oakcitysigns]

one thing i noticed. "Winner picked December 21th..." should be 21st.