Like Maniac said..... I'll not hassle you about your name either, but then why should we.... you can't read it anyway.
In your latest attempt.... do you really think people are gonna study a business card as closely as you have made it out to be ?? Your attempts thus far have been from the very hard to read and understand to the hardest thing to read that I've seen in a long long time.
Have you ever read a trade magazine or a coupon clipper magazine ?? Would you ever buy anything from an ad in which the colors and type are so fierce, you cannot read anything, thus making you anxious to buy from that business ??
C'mon, just use your head for a moment. You're looking at this stuff on a huge monitor and looking at it for minutes, if not hours. Most of the time when one hands out a business card.... the person has a second or two to read it and if they have to stand there for five minutes, trying to figure out what is written in a few words.... what does that tell your potential customer about your designing skills if you can't get off of square one with your own identity card ??
Use some of the hints and ideas from this place, but the main one, regardless if you HAVE to use that name or not.... at least make it recognizable for good reasons and not something someone would remember because it's so awful looking.
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dude, you went from straight copying the entire premise of another card design to just going horrible with it. I'm sure you've watched A Wondeful Life ... so I'll assume you get this next part. Every card you design, a graphic designer loses a pinky finger.
