Gino
I have been reading Mike Adams’ book about business storytelling. What caught my attention is that stories can reduce the push back. And then, I was reading about how they can be the path to success. I started thinking about your story and decided to apply what I have learned. Take a look this story and see if you can make it your own.
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Mr. John Doe, on Tuesday, August 4th, 2020, I was happy to hear that you need some work done on your equipment. Over the years, I have grown to really appreciate your loyal relationship with me and my company. Those thoughts came into my mind as I saw your new project.
As things moved along, we agreed together that your equipment would be at my place on Thursday, August 13th, at 8 a.m. (Note: 13 is not my favorite number.)
Then, on Wednesday, I began to go through many steps to prepare a large space for your equipment, and get everything lined up to be ready to start just as soon as it arrived. I knew it would take a couple of my highly skilled crew members, so I blocked out their time. Then, just to be sure, I went over all of my plans with my top team member. I was confident that we were ready to take excellent care of your project in a timely manner. I felt good about it.
Alas, at 8 a.m. the next morning, your equipment was not here. At 8:30 it was not here. My feeling good about it began to turn south. I tried to phone you, but could not get through. Let me tell you, I was starting to feel anger, frustration, all feelings that I do not like to have. I am not able to think straight when I have those feelings. It makes a mess of my whole day, and strangely ripples through my staff.
I am hoping that we can come to some kind of workable solution. I am in a calm mood right now, so it might be a good time to negotiate. Please phone me.
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Gino, what do you think? I would enjoy re-writing it to fit your exact situation.