BAMM it hits you in the face wow ...it'd so loud it screams, shouts, and howls... lol
anyway you may like the whole design ,.. it is cool as hell looks great even for a nich crowd
in order to achieve more appeal ya still need contrast and or harmony
1.... the background design .. should be just that a background... translucent or muted also can be decorative
2.... copy .. you need to decide if you to contrast or harmony or just decorative
maybe I'm just plain wrong ....anyway ,,,, other then what's been said I kinda like it but think you can do better with the same cool look